tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685234606106224921.post2706681039565065600..comments2023-05-16T13:58:55.743+00:00Comments on Welcome to Maple Class: Chloe's 100 Word Challenge Week 27Maple Classhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15142234010068809517noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685234606106224921.post-32488504863231882892012-04-28T22:30:37.624+00:002012-04-28T22:30:37.624+00:00Hi, Chloe. This is a very good 100WC. I love the...Hi, Chloe. This is a very good 100WC. I love the way you described the sleeping dragon, and I loved the idea of his eye opening up just a little. You describe your emotions well, too. Only one little thing -- often we writers have to choose between I and me. Here's a trick: take your sentence Me and my friend (Elisha) took... Remove everything but Me, (pronoun) and took, (verb.) If "Me took" doesn't sound right, try "I" instead -- I took. That's how you know which pronoun to use. I learned that in Grade 6, and I've never forgotten!Judith Atwoodhttp://diabeticredemption.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685234606106224921.post-54635375742672964892012-04-24T09:09:00.472+00:002012-04-24T09:09:00.472+00:00I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the simile ...I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the simile "Our legs were shaking like jelly." I couldn't really understand it near the end but apart from that it was excellent. This reminds me of trying to stroke a tiger ata the zoo! <br />Why not check out our blog at <br />www.tetherdown-primary-school.j2webby.com<br />From Jessica at Tetherdown Primary.Jessicanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685234606106224921.post-63303203882865776952012-04-20T11:13:09.764+00:002012-04-20T11:13:09.764+00:00what a great story and you used a great similie (o...what a great story and you used a great similie (our legs were shaking like jelly)lukenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7685234606106224921.post-17898033813711449112012-04-20T11:11:08.125+00:002012-04-20T11:11:08.125+00:00Hi Chloe
I like how you and your friend Elisha st...Hi Chloe <br />I like how you and your friend Elisha stared at the beast. And how your legs shook like jelly<br /><br />From EllaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com