Friday, 3 February 2012

Ella's 100 Word Challenge Week 19


The ground slowly parted.....

"Whoa!" a random guy suddenly shouted.  The ground collapsed and people, cars and buildings were falling into this massive huge hole.  Anyway, I thought to myself, does anything live down in that hole? So I thought, if I go closer but not too close, I will see if anything does live down there.  So I step that inch closer and see if anything lives in that crack in the road.  I'm standing there in front of this dark, gloomy crack.  No one appeared to be inside.  Suddenly everyone panicked and a man pushed me into the lifeless hole.  I have lived here all my live since then. 
Will I ever return to the surface?

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10 comments:

  1. Anonymous22 February 2012 at 10:19

    WOW! Ella. Was their a monster down there or something. I liked your 100 word challenge. I don't want to be mean but I think you have used the word CRACK alot. Thats from my opinion.

    Rhi Rhi

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    1. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 11:53

      I don't know there have to be a novel so you know but thank you for telling me I have used the word crack alot

      Ella Bella Mostsarella Cheese on Toast

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  2. Devil$$$22 February 2012 at 10:19

    Hi Ella i really like your story.It is very interesting and awsome!!!!

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    1. Anonymous27 February 2012 at 14:43

      Thanks Toby
      I really glad you found it interesting it was hard to write. :p


      From Ella bella mostsarella cheese on toast

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  3. Anonymous22 February 2012 at 10:20

    hi Ella
    i think your 100 word challange is amazing.
    I think next time you could use more connectives.
    But over all it is fab!! sashax

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    1. Anonymous31 May 2012 at 10:42

      Thank you for telling me I need to use more connectives.
      From Ella

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  4. Prawnsandhummus22 February 2012 at 16:06

    Wow Ella! The main character is really curious and brave! Also, I love the way you ended it on a mysterious question. Absolutely great!

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    1. Anonymous31 May 2012 at 10:45

      Thank you Prawnsandhummus
      I was aiming to make the character curious and brave.

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  5. A big pot of ice cream24 February 2012 at 11:56

    Hi Ella I love that you character is so keen to look down the hole. Jess

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    1. Anonymous31 May 2012 at 10:46

      Thanks the character is meant to be keen.

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