Friday, 24 February 2012

Olivia's 100 Word Challenge

Oh Dear I Forgot It Was Leap Year This year is a leap year but I forgot! And because it was a leap year I celebrated Christmas a day early. It was December 24th, Chrismas eve or as I thought Christmas day. I had wondered why Santa had'nt brought me any presents, had I been naughty but I had been good all year. I ran upstairs to my room and burst into tears on my bed. My mum walked in and asked me what was wrong. "Santa has'nt come this year," I sobbed. "It's christmas eve though, Santa does'nt come till christmas day," she told me,"It's a leap year silly,"
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14 comments:

  1. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 16:33

    Well Olivia. I like your 100 word challenge when you celebrated christmas a day early and that you thought santa didn't come.
    Rhi Rhi

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    1. olivia25 February 2012 at 18:35

      I would hate it if I got really got mixed
      up like that

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  2. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 18:32

    I really like how you got into detail about other holidays. I really liked it over all.

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  3. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 18:48

    Hi Olivia!
    I really liked your story. It was very creative.

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  4. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 19:53

    Hi Olivia
    I love your 100 wc! It was amazing. It was very descriptive and used a lot of good words in there
    Sashaxxx

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    1. olivia25 February 2012 at 18:33

      thanks smash I liked yours aswell, it was great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    2. Anonymous26 February 2012 at 12:41

      It's all right
      U have 9 comments!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
      Well done

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  5. Emilia25 February 2012 at 16:37

    Olivia, I love your 100 word challenge. It was very descriptive and realistic like Sasha's. Keep it up and I hope you do the 100 word challange every week.
    From Emilia at www.6d.highlawnprimary.net

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  6. Anonymous25 February 2012 at 17:47

    Good work Olivia you used the prompt very well I am inpressed. Sadly, dosen't is not spelt Dose'nt also has'nt. Apart from that this is really good.


    Keep blogging:} Tomasso www.6d.highlawnprimary.net.

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  7. Anonymous26 February 2012 at 19:31

    Hello Olivia,
    I really liked your 100 word challenge. At the beging just make sure it makes sence. I loved how you used speech in your story
    Keep it up!
    From Chloe at High Lawn Primary School, Bolton.

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  8. Anonymous28 February 2012 at 08:32

    Hi Liv
    I love your 100 wc. I would hate it of I did that for real!!
    Keep the hard work up!!!!!! Smash

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  9. Anonymous28 February 2012 at 13:44

    I like your 100 word challenge

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  10. Miss Carew6 March 2012 at 12:45

    Hello Olivia
    I enjoyed reading your story. I felt that your idea for the stroy was very clever and I liked the fact that you had not realised it was a leap year until the very end of the year (at christmas). To improve upon your story you could have used more adjectives and possibly some better placed punctuation. For example when you use speech marks you must start your following sentence on the next line.

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