Friday, 24 February 2012

Rhiannon's 100 word challenge

… Oh Dear I Forgot It Was Leap Year … 100 Word Challenge “Oh no” Ruby screamed. I have done something really stupid. I have done something incredibly stupid. I have celebrated Easter a day early, Christmas a day early and even my birthday. Until someone said to me, “you having a good day?” I thought to my self, wondering why he said that, because he never ever does. Then I realized, he was giving me a hint, thinking, are you going to propose to me? I whispered to myself. “Why?” I shouted out loud, “I am an idiot! I forgot it was leap year! I am an idiot! Once again!” Ha!
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15 comments:

  1. Lydia and Hollie Brookburn primary24 February 2012 at 14:40

    Hi Rhiannon,

    I really love the whole of it.
    We think you could improve by checking though your work and find out the missing punctuation.
    Overall my it was great!

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    1. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 20:17

      Thanks Lydia and Hollie, I will check through
      Rhiannon

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  2. Prawnsandhummus24 February 2012 at 16:26

    Wow Rhiannon. It's brilliant! I love the humour and the way a lot of it is in speech!

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  3. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 18:40

    Nice story. It was very different from others I have read.

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  4. Anonymous24 February 2012 at 18:42

    This story was good, but a little confusing. But overall I thought it was ok.

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  5. Devil$$$24 February 2012 at 19:34

    Hi Rhiannon, really like you wc it is brillient and the characters are really belivable.

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  6. Devil$$$27 February 2012 at 14:13

    Hi Rhiannon (again) like the story so much i decided to comment again.

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  7. Anonymous27 February 2012 at 14:32

    hi Rhiannon I really loved your 1oo word challenge and there was loads of humour.

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  8. Anonymous28 February 2012 at 11:11

    Hi Rhianon. What an interesting piece of writing. Fancy celebrating everything a day late. I like the idea of a possible marriage proposal but if you had realised that it was February 29th I am not sure how you celebrated everything else a day late. You use an informal humourous tone, which makes your writing a pleaseure to read. Thank you for joining 100WC.

    Clare Powell (team 100WC)

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    1. Sportsmad28 February 2012 at 20:19

      Thankyou Clare, I didn't realy like my piece of writing. It doesn't make much sense.

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  9. Anonymous28 February 2012 at 18:10

    I thought your wc was lovely. As you are so young I don't wish you to be proposing and getting married yet.

    love from

    your mum

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  10. ceri29 February 2012 at 13:38

    WOW! Rhiannon i wish my 100wc was that good - it was great! I loved it!
    From Ceri :-)

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    1. Evil Sister1 March 2012 at 20:42

      Thankyou Ceri. I am sure you can do better. You are a very good writer.
      From Your Evil Sister

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  11. Ash class MH CR29 February 2012 at 13:45

    Hi its Matty and Charlotte from ash class. Your story is fabulous we can't wait to hear more. We absolutly loved it. :-)

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  12. Anonymous6 March 2012 at 20:01

    I like the word incredible. Fancy celebrating everything on the wrong day. Did he propose?
    Rhiannon - Flamborough CE Primary

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