Thursday, 1 March 2012

Greg's 100 Word Challenge

The worst way to die... I stared into the glass cabinet. The strange ball seemed to stare back at me. On the side of the box was a competition: What's the ball? I decided to call it a scrunched up skeleton. The following morning, there was a knock on the door. I had to open with my left hand because I couldn't bend my right. Although the knock was quiet, the man who answered it was excited. "You've won!"he yelled. "What!?" "The ball competition! You were right! It's a skeleton with a disease!" My heart skipped a beat. Yesterday, I noticed a crack and I stupidly touched the bone...
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9 comments:

  1. Anonymous1 March 2012 at 16:42

    At first I didn't really get it, but now it makes better sense to me. I liked how you used your imagination.

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  2. Sophie W. (St. John Vianney1 March 2012 at 16:43

    Oh wow. Nice story, it was very creative. So, does this mean he/she is going to get the disease too? Great work

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  3. Ross4 March 2012 at 18:24

    Amazing! You have made your story extremely exciting and you have used some tremendous words such as scrunched and stupidly! What makes it even more marvelous is the fact that you have used colons and speech (that's really hard to put into your work). Also, you have used an outstanding opener which is although, once again, that's really hard to put in your sentences especially that it's at the beginning of the sentence. Well done! Ross at www.highlawnprimary.net

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  4. Miss Senington6 March 2012 at 10:48

    This is very impressive for 100 words! I really enjoyed reading it as it is incredibly creative and has a fantastic element of mystery and surprise. I would be very interested to know what happened before this and what will happen afterwards! Great work.

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  5. Anonymous6 March 2012 at 19:27

    Wow this is an amazing piece of writing you should be very proud of yourself. It is an amazing piece of writing because you have used level five punctuation. Also you have used some personification (that is really hard to do) so it is great that you have done that. Keep up the brilliant work and keep going!
    From George at www.6d.highlawnprimary.net

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  6. jack in ash class7 March 2012 at 13:43

    This is so cool greg i love it.

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  7. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 16:53

    Greg that was a super a-ma-zing story!

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  8. silly fruit5679 March 2012 at 12:07

    Hi Greg I love your 100wc. But I don't understand what you you mean when you say the worst way to die...

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  9. Molly R (Ash)12 March 2012 at 17:13

    Wow Greg, thats a really good 100wc! I love the way you say, ' The worst way to die...' Its realt effective/1

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