The White Spiders.
Have
you ever seen a spider that is so white it is almost invisible? Well I have, in
fact I haven’t just seen one or two, I’ve seen FIFTY little white spiders that
crawl so fast they look like a miniature white blurs, zooming round the floor.
This is the story how… On Monday, last week, I was walking to school when I saw
two little white blurs racing past my feet at top speed. How peculiar! Then,
all of a sudden, forty-eight small blurs started climbing up my leg. Carefully
I pushed them off my leg but one bit me. OUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well I do comments for the 100wc and look who's I've been given!!!
ReplyDeleteYou've used that tricky prompt well, Franny - well done. Although I do hate the idea of spiders crawling around everywhere - ugh! Do always make sure that you check through your work for any small mistakes - eg: 'a miniature white blurs'.
I hope the spider's bite didn't hurt too much! Keep on blogging, Franny!
Mr K :-)
Hi Fran
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your 100 wc when you read it out! I could really imagine the picture. You have used all the promt words in your story! Well done Fran!!!!
From sassy spider x
Well Franny. I like your 100wc, infact I love it but, like Mr K, that little sentence didn't make sense but other-wise. BRILLIANT.
ReplyDeleteRhiannon
Hi Fran
ReplyDeleteI really like your 100 wc! Fancy having mr Kenyon leaving you a comment! One thing to improve is to check your work because one sentence dosen't make sence apart from that it was amazing!! Sasha
Franny that was amazing! I adore the description of the spiders. Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteHi Fran
ReplyDeleteI realy like how you discribed that the white spiders were so white they were almost invisible from Jess