Thursday, 1 March 2012

Jess's 100 Word Challenge

I had no idea what it was or where it came from. All I knew, was it glowed. Not just any old glow, the type of glow that makes you go crazy. This ball had fungus and mushrooms growing all over it. When I stepped closer, I could see that this ball had dead decomposing bodies. Before I could take another step, the police arrived, I ran away in to the darkness. I heard a screech. The ball had devoured the policeman; I dare not go near it again. I ran for my life and phoned my mum.
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8 comments:

  1. Norah1 March 2012 at 16:40

    Good story! It left me wanting to hear more about the "ball". Make it certain you capitalize after a "." I love all the explaining words! Keep up the good work!

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  2. Chloe4 March 2012 at 15:06

    Hello Jess,
    what a wonderful 100 word challenge. I loved how you descrived it as a ball of dead bodies. Very creative thinking! You made me shake a little when you said the police came. Good story!
    From Chloe at High Lawn Primary School.

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  3. Prawnsandhummus5 March 2012 at 20:25

    Wow Jess! What amazing description and a brilliant story in just 100 words! Your writing is fantastic and I think you should put more work on the blog! I especailly liked the opening and the description of the ball, it showed wonderful imagination!

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  4. Lorely Team 100WC6 March 2012 at 11:58

    Hi Jess! Well done with your story - that was an interesting way to look at the picture. It sounds like you made the ball into some alien from another planet! I certainly wouldn't want to go crazy just from looking at it. Shame about the policeman!

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  5. Anonymous6 March 2012 at 12:48

    Hello Jess,
    What a fantastic and captivating story about this ball. I am very intreagued as to what will happen next and if it will continue devouring people or if it will be stopped in some way.

    I think your use of advectives and adverbs really add to the story and makes it very interesting. I hope to stumble upon a part 2 of this story so I can see what happens next. I would also like to know more about how this ball makes you feel.

    From Miss A Alvarez (trainee teacher) at Roehampton University

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  6. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 15:24

    to jess

    that story made me shiver because it was so scary but great!!!

    from 2 girls in rome class julia and tanya

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  7. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 15:29

    Abhay and luqman from rome class

    We really like your blog and great story!!

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  8. Matty22 May 2012 at 08:34

    WELLDONE! Jess that is a AMAZING! peice of writting keep up the good work and you will be the best writer ever maybe better than J.k Rouling.

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