“YAAAAAAAAYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!
It’s Easter!“ I screamed as I ran down the stairs. I pulled on my clothes and
grabbed my basket for the egg hunt. When we arrived, I could see that almost
every child in the area had turned up. ”GO!” At the sound of that word, a stampede
of children came past me. I started to explore, looking in every possible
hiding place I could see. After finding two measly mini eggs, I noticed
something in the bush. An oversized bunny hopping around with a coat that looked like it was made from chocolate.
I inched closer and suddenly, the chocolate rabbit melted in the sun.
Thank you Rosie! Another great piece of writing from you. You show a very competitive side to you here! Some nice use of language 'stampede of children' and 'inched closer'. Well done.
ReplyDeleteMrs P
Hello Rosie,
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely piece of writing. 'Measly mini eggs' is good; in fact your use of adjectives throughout is great. You make Easter sound so exciting!
Can't wait.
Liz (Team 100WC)
What a fabulous story Rosie. I really enjoyed reading this. Your use of vocabulary is very good and had made your writing very exciting! Well done, keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteWow Rosie this is a amazing piece of wrighting you sould be very proud of your self. I thik that the vocabulary you use (stampede,explore)and many more are great. Also I like how you have used speech in your wrighting and have put comers in the right place. Well done and keep up the good work!
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Hi Rosie
ReplyDeleteI love your 100 word challenge, good use of punctuation and connectives well done and keep up the good work
from Matty
Hi Rosie
ReplyDeleteI thought your 100 word was great!
I liked the words that you have used like stampede.
I also thought you used some good puncuation.
From Rebecca