Tears of Gold.
“We’ve finally found it Moby!” I squealed. After months of
searching, we had finally found the mask of Anubis. It glowed a tremendous gold,
in the orchard green forest. It was from ancient Egypt . It was said that at a
funeral of a Pharaoh it (when worn) would weep tears of gold, and I had
found it! But now I had an excruciating choice. Keep it for myself –and tears
of gold-, or sell it for millions? Well before I made that decision I would have
to make it home. Uh-oh I’d forgotten the way! Would we die out here?...
Hi Tess
ReplyDeletei love your 100 wc! i love the bit were you put
it glowed a tremendous gold in the orchard green forest. I like thew way you have used - a lot in your writing. you are amazing writer.
keep up the good work!!!
sassy
Hi Tessa,
ReplyDeleteImagine finding an Egyptian mask, worn by Anubis himself! Was he the one with the dog or crocodile head, we can never remember?
We really like the sentence "It glowed a tremendous gold, in the orchard green forest". Great use of colour to help the reader picture the scene.
Tim & Moby
Great use of vocabulary here Tess. I can see that you are trying to use a range of punctuation too. You have thought of a really unusual idea for your story and used the prompt in an imaginative way. Uplevel this by thinking of a wider range of sentence openings.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Super work as always!
Mrs P