Friday 18 May 2012

Tessa's 100 Word Challenge Week 31




Tears of Gold.

“We’ve finally found it Moby!” I squealed. After months of searching, we had finally found the mask of Anubis. It glowed a tremendous gold, in the orchard green forest. It was from ancient Egypt. It was said that at a funeral of a Pharaoh it (when worn) would weep tears of gold, and I had found it! But now I had an excruciating choice. Keep it for myself –and tears of gold-, or sell it for millions? Well before I made that decision I would have to make it home. Uh-oh I’d forgotten the way! Would we die out here?...  

3 comments:

  1. Hi Tess
    i love your 100 wc! i love the bit were you put
    it glowed a tremendous gold in the orchard green forest. I like thew way you have used - a lot in your writing. you are amazing writer.
    keep up the good work!!!
    sassy

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  2. Hi Tessa,

    Imagine finding an Egyptian mask, worn by Anubis himself! Was he the one with the dog or crocodile head, we can never remember?

    We really like the sentence "It glowed a tremendous gold, in the orchard green forest". Great use of colour to help the reader picture the scene.

    Tim & Moby

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  3. Great use of vocabulary here Tess. I can see that you are trying to use a range of punctuation too. You have thought of a really unusual idea for your story and used the prompt in an imaginative way. Uplevel this by thinking of a wider range of sentence openings.
    Well done.
    Super work as always!

    Mrs P

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