Friday, 24 February 2012

Sasha's 100 word challenge

'Oh dear! I forgot it was leap year!' Stomped my brother Max. 'I forgot it was leap year!' shouted Mum. I celebrated my birthday a day early. I am an idiot. My birthday is tomorrow. I had just finished opening the presents then looked on the calendar to write a date on it then in big bold letters LEAP YEAR! Oh no. My family were coming round in ten mins. It was the wrong day. It was the most dreadful birthday ever. I ran upstairs and sunk my head into the pillow. My mum knocked on the door. I let her in. She pulled the covers of me she said “oh darling you wet the bed.” “NO mum it is wet from my floods of tears.”

15 comments:

  1. Sasha,
    You are a cheeky monkey wetting the bed. I thought it was a good piece of writing and I think it could be one of your best. Oh and you should like your 100 word challenge.
    Rhi Rhi

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    1. Hi Rhi Rhi
      Thank u I will be proud of it!
      I think yours is really good and very descriptive. I think it was one of my best piece of work I have done! Have a good weekend!! Sashax

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  2. Sasha was bursting with pride to tell me her 100 word challenge had been published on the blog. Thank you for making her day!

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  3. great 100 wc sasha very descriptive and was funny yet sad i like the way you have mixed all the emotions into one piece of text by joe over and out

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  4. I like your 100 word challenge Sasha it was really descriptive and funny

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  5. Sasha,

    What a fun piece of writing. Poor thing. I love the descriptions and your use of dialogue to reveal how she was feeling. "NO mum it is wet from my floods of tears.” I would think she should be allowed to celebrate twice. After all, leap year doesn't come around that often.

    Great work.

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  6. Hi maple class
    Well done sasha it was really good
    (meg)

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  7. Hi Sasha, I think your 100 word challenge is great! I love how it all links in together and how it is realistic. I love your blog and I can't wait to read some more of your 100 word challenges.
    From Emilia at www.6d.highlawnprimary.net

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    1. Hi it sasha
      Thank u for saying good things about my writing
      Keep blogging! Sasha

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  8. This writing is really real sounding good efect. You mush have tried really hard. well done

    keep it up : } tomasso www.6d.highlawnprimary.net

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    1. Hi it's sasha
      Thank you for saying goo things about my work! Do u do the 100 wc??

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  9. Awesome story Smasha loved it. It was great I hope that wasnt a real life insident.
    olivia

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    1. Hi I no
      I wonder what would happen if it was real
      I love your 100 wc! Keep blogging
      Sasha

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  10. hi everyone,
    thank u for all the commets u have sent me. they do mean alot to me!! keep blogging!! smasherx

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  11. Becky & Kirsty29 February 2012 at 13:55

    We like you story - it was brilunt! Go to our blog pleass www.ashclassgreenfields.blogspot.com
    from Becky and Kirsty.

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